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    new toon !

    Please feedback on my new toon !

    toon!

    it was meant to be for Halloween so its theme is a little scary…um… its short and that’s about it.

    Hope you ‘get it’? and I know the sounds a bit wack ! Any comments please let me know .

    Dom !

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    i like the 3d scenes but i dont like the plot
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    fair comment

    thank you for being honest !

    i thought the plot would work as it was based on a true experience. However meaybe it does not transend well in this medium.

    thanks for the feedback . d

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    Re: fair comment

    LOL, made me laugh.

    I'd maybe make it more obvious that the stereo is going off ( I think it's the stereo), and maybe stick in a few close-up shots of eyes looking in the mirror.
    Not sure how much work is involved in rendering the 3d scenese either, but some alpha blending on the headlights ,so they fade into nothing, either with a gradient fill or a fuzzy blurred cone saved as .png would look more realistic, as would some more colour on the buildings, maybe some lit windows, lamps, streetlights and a lot more colour.

    Then the transition from safe town into scary countryside would be more dramatic.

    But still works okay as it is, I'd only change if you are still looking to add/tweak things.
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    WOH ! that is a sweet idea: I love the idea with the lights and making a safe town by contrast.

    Will try the close ups too .

    Thanks for the advice !

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    No worries, looking forward to seeing more.
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    what did you use to make that? flash? or did you use swift or something else?
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    maya my friend !

    bit of a complex pig (maya), hence why in my animation it is all so simple . Quite a few options with the rendering though.

    I tried to do it first in Swift but think that even though it is simple it is a little complex for swift .

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    hey up thundaChunk

    did you have any ideas on ways to make the stereo going off more obvious ?

    tried messing about the lights in the building idea it looks sweet but my computer wont render them !

    thanks for all you suggestions so far

    Dom

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    Liked it.Didnt realise Maya could export swfs.

    Originally posted by skillyMcWilly

    did you have any ideas on ways to make the stereo going off more obvious ?
    At the first closeup of the radio where you start the tuner display animation show one of the guys pressing a button to start the scan.(Maybe you did but I couldn't see it)

    That way you are aware of the radio scanning for the rest of the anim.

    Just as the music plays go to a closeup of the radio. Almost fill the screen with it I'd say.
    You could also animate an equalizer but that might make it a bit too obvious and would take extra work.

    Just my opinion though.

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    it (maya) can since version 5 i think... its pretty powerful stuff.

    Thank you for your feedback .. there was a finger but if you missed probably others did too !

    will try the extreme close up thing. Like the idea of the eq ..wish i had come up with it ... will try it out if i can find the time

    Dom

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    I didnt notice the finger
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