critisize please

[Akane]

starting a litle horse animation. There is no detail rigth now, but tell me what you think about the motion ?
thanks in advance.

http://akane.zerion.com/files/cheval1.swf

[fierystars]

I think it's really good...but, is the head suppose to change shape?

[Akane]

thanks =)
no, the head is not supposed to change shape. I just need to practice harder !

[Flashkit]

Looks good... but wheres the tail

[jydnas]

very cool...i like it.

[shockanime]

Yeah, that is well animated. Good job

[Akane]

thanks all !!
to be honnest, i followed the advice of "Preston Blair" to animate this horse.I guess that CNO could recognize it. (but i didn't draw over his art)

[armadillo88]

very very good. mabye add some features to the horse such as face har , etc

[zbailey]

I think that is very awesome i want to get into anime and flash, do you think you could send me the .fla of that simple animation si can disect it? Please
zach_bailey@hotmail.com

[CNO]

Good Akane!
I did recognize it.
I used to have an animation professor who could identify any artwork copied from any of the major teaching books ("Ah, that's a Preston Blair walk cycle, isn't it?" or "That's a Muybridge trot." )
The previous posts have some good comments - hair on the head and a tail would really add to the secondary motion of the character, and I bet no one would even notice the head change shape.
Overall, you did do a great job, as 4-legged characters can be extremely difficult to animate.

[armadillo88]

i defiantly agree with cno . adding the features would really add to that. you think you can send me the .fla. i might wanna use that when makin one of my movies. i was gonna have an arab riding a horse through the desert and it slowly comes to a stop and jumps off with a sword in hand. of course if you allow me to use the fla i wouldnt have to spend alotta time with the horse.

[mg33]

That horse looks great, and I don't think it's bad if the head changes shape, I hardly noticed that it did.

mg33

[Ior]

nice horse bro'

have you seen that cheeprace game in the arcade section?....you could make a supasweet horse jumping game in the same manner...

[Shipley]

That's really good. Though you should have the chest and the rear move up and down more as he runs.

p.s. CNO what animation school did attend?

[TK421]

Nice Job... But I think the animation is a bit fast? Or maybe jerky. It's been a while since I've observed a horse run, but never the less, you've done a fine job so far. Also, perhaps the legs need to lift a little higher? And of course, like the others have mentioned... More Detail!!!

[Akane]

thanks everyone for the feedback. your comments are good and make sense. Maybe could i send the fla to the ppl who want it ! but i'd need to clean it up before (bitmaps are so huge) and i already got work for this forum and the tutorials. bE patient, i'll do it a bit later , as sooon as possible.

[Reen]

H akane very good job you made i like the moving ground it looks very coool !!! this is as really good made animation

[armadillo88]

akane i have the perfect sound file for that. it goes perfectly together. i played it while i watched it and it was meant for it. i was gonna use it when i had my horse traveling through the desert. if u want it u got my email down in the profile

[Mugen]

I really liked the depth of the back ground.

[iceunsafe]

Very nice. Two very minor things - only because your asking for it

Something about the horses back distracts me - is it just a bit too long compared to its stomach. Also, on my monitor I see some blue artifacts that don't quite match the sky in the lower right hand corner of the sky -- a few elipses. I really like the clouds, by the way.