PDA

Click to See Complete Forum and Search --> : critisize please



Akane
07-21-2000, 06:16 PM
starting a litle horse animation. There is no detail rigth now, but tell me what you think about the motion ?
thanks in advance.

http://akane.zerion.com/files/cheval1.swf

fierystars
07-21-2000, 06:32 PM
I think it's really good...but, is the head suppose to change shape?

Akane
07-21-2000, 06:35 PM
thanks =)
no, the head is not supposed to change shape. I just need to practice harder !

Flashkit
07-21-2000, 06:55 PM
Looks good... but wheres the tail :)

jydnas
07-21-2000, 07:02 PM
very cool...i like it.

shockanime
07-22-2000, 12:29 AM
Yeah, that is well animated. Good job:)

Akane
07-22-2000, 10:56 AM
thanks all !!
to be honnest, i followed the advice of "Preston Blair" to animate this horse.I guess that CNO could recognize it. (but i didn't draw over his art)

armadillo88
07-22-2000, 12:44 PM
very very good. mabye add some features to the horse such as face har , etc

zbailey
07-22-2000, 02:41 PM
I think that is very awesome i want to get into anime and flash, do you think you could send me the .fla of that simple animation si can disect it? Please :)
zach_bailey@hotmail.com

CNO
07-22-2000, 03:27 PM
Good Akane!
I did recognize it. :)
I used to have an animation professor who could identify any artwork copied from any of the major teaching books ("Ah, that's a Preston Blair walk cycle, isn't it?" or "That's a Muybridge trot." :))
The previous posts have some good comments - hair on the head and a tail would really add to the secondary motion of the character, and I bet no one would even notice the head change shape.
Overall, you did do a great job, as 4-legged characters can be extremely difficult to animate.

armadillo88
07-22-2000, 05:22 PM
i defiantly agree with cno . adding the features would really add to that. you think you can send me the .fla. i might wanna use that when makin one of my movies. i was gonna have an arab riding a horse through the desert and it slowly comes to a stop and jumps off with a sword in hand. of course if you allow me to use the fla i wouldnt have to spend alotta time with the horse. :)

mg33
07-22-2000, 06:37 PM
That horse looks great, and I don't think it's bad if the head changes shape, I hardly noticed that it did.

mg33

Ior
07-22-2000, 07:30 PM
nice horse bro'

have you seen that cheeprace game in the arcade section?....you could make a supasweet horse jumping game in the same manner...

Shipley
07-23-2000, 01:43 AM
That's really good. Though you should have the chest and the rear move up and down more as he runs.

p.s. CNO what animation school did attend?

TK421
07-23-2000, 03:09 AM
Nice Job... But I think the animation is a bit fast? Or maybe jerky. It's been a while since I've observed a horse run, but never the less, you've done a fine job so far. Also, perhaps the legs need to lift a little higher? And of course, like the others have mentioned... More Detail!!! :)

Akane
07-23-2000, 01:53 PM
thanks everyone for the feedback. your comments are good and make sense. Maybe could i send the fla to the ppl who want it ! but i'd need to clean it up before (bitmaps are so huge) and i already got work for this forum and the tutorials. bE patient, i'll do it a bit later , as sooon as possible.

Reen
07-24-2000, 07:17 AM
H akane very good job you made i like the moving ground it looks very coool !!! this is as really good made animation

armadillo88
07-24-2000, 09:06 AM
akane i have the perfect sound file for that. it goes perfectly together. i played it while i watched it and it was meant for it. i was gonna use it when i had my horse traveling through the desert. if u want it u got my email down in the profile

Mugen
07-24-2000, 09:38 AM
I really liked the depth of the back ground. :)

iceunsafe
07-24-2000, 09:30 PM
Very nice. Two very minor things - only because your asking for it ;)

Something about the horses back distracts me - is it just a bit too long compared to its stomach. Also, on my monitor I see some blue artifacts that don't quite match the sky in the lower right hand corner of the sky -- a few elipses. I really like the clouds, by the way.

Akane
07-24-2000, 09:36 PM
you are rigth ! i made a mistake about the body proportions.
the artefact you see, that's cause it should be to a precise size.

thanks for reply !