pick it apart please...

[oahu_surfa]

well i think i got a rough sketch down. its very hodge podge at this point so understand the movies will clean up. just curious about load times, appearance, etc... http://www.geocities.com/southshoreg...lashembed.html

[jhightman]

Hey surfa,

Nice!!

ok heres whats hitting me wrong.. can u make the building more vertical in the lower left corner..? that whole are down there is really sweet , especially with the night lights and traffic moving effects! but the way that building is leaning back.. mmm i dont know just kinda weird.. seems like its going to fall oer into water.

the opening animation into your portfolio section really doesn't do anything.. maybe if one he framed the box, it would open up right there from where he put it, like the way it expands on the other side...

also make the arrow that points to the specific button only work when you are over the buttons.. its annoying when u are mousing around over an image and that thing is moving back and forth abouve you... it keeps pulling your eyes away fromthe artwork

other than that its really nice!! clean simple easy to navigate !! keep at it

jason

[JasonIR]

That's one nice peice of work. I like it, very clean. I would reccomend taking the bold off the fonts in profile and playing around with the loading text effect a bit.

Nice work.

[oahu_surfa]

thanks guys...i can't figure out how to adjust the hit area of the arrow. does anybody see a thin white seem between the top of the city(waikiki) and the rest of the page? i need to work on my preloader skills 2. it seems like a soundtrack really jumps up the file so i'm gonna try to avoid it. most importantly i just want it to load fast on any machine.

[alty29]

very nice, the city effect at the bottom is awesome, add some sound FX though

[jhightman]

no no u can use sound.. i would use like a seashore or waves!!

have the site initially load and then once its loaded have itload an external sound file to a new level

so your site loads...

and you have a layer with an action that says the following:

loadMovieNum ("http://www.geocities.com/southshoregraphics/seashore.swf", 99);

then all u have to do is make a small swf of the sounds

so your site is functional and then it loads while user browses.. for a small ambience sound it will be no big deal

here are some

http://www.sonic.net/sgman/sgm/audio.html

http://www.whaleclub.com/multimedia/...unds/ocean.wav

tone em down a little and make em loopable

Goodluck,
Jason

[oahu_surfa]

thanks for the fresh opinions everybody. it's been a long haul. you have helped me immensely over the last several months, my sincerest thanks

[creativeXL]

Just wanted to say congrats as well. I love your design layout, especially the living city in the corner. Great work.

[TiTaN_GSW]

Looks very good. The city, as some mentioned is a really nice touch.

1 thing, when u move the mouse to the left side, the little triangle disapeares behind an invisible wall.
Perhaps, it could just go on until the white border, like the right one does.

Also, dont overdo on preloaders. Let the site load fully, like all sections should be availioabe for browsing.

Subsections could then be laoded.
For me, i prefer to wait a bit longer for 1 preloader, than seeing 5 in each sections

[junaidzamir]

That Looks Beautiful.The layout is great.
Well done Great WORK.

[dholtby]

Very clean and pleasing to the eye site. The sublte animation in the bottom left picture is great.

To stop the arrow animation when you are not over the menu you need to write some if statements.

Such as

if (_xmouse <= ### && _xmouse >= ###) {
setProperty("arrow", _visible, 0 )
)

same with the _ymouse properties.

Hope that helps, or gets you started

[steiner_99]

I love it man...
But I must agree with jhightman.
I think the little white arrow takes away from the
nice scenic layout you have.
I think you could lose it completely, but that's just me.

I love the color.