Open Battle :: "everybody was kung fu fightin'..."

[groupof1]

Game's over...

[squidlips]

i like the idea and the composition of this image, there's just something that isn't quite working. maybe just a slightly lighter shadow on the top right corner would have let you put the swirl in black behind it and maybe layer the type a little bit or something. gonna start working on a volley soonish.

[squidlips]

had fun doing this one, came together alot easier than i thought it would.

[groupof1]

I agree with you Squid. I started out strong on but came up just a little short of where i was trying to go.

Honestly, I had a hard time working off of your monkey image. It is well put together and there really isn't any one thing that says "pick me, pick me" to bring into a new composition. Nicely done sir.

[groupof1]

I don't think I said so... but I like your return.

[Nogol]

i broke the mirror.

[groupof1]

hey man, If your gonna have 7 years of bad luck you might as well make it look good. And you did, I like it.

I'm curious what you did to get the glass shards look.

[Nogol]

just the simple Polygonal Lasso Tool.

Select and move it.

[groupof1]

Nice... simple and effective. Good work.

[silverx2]

the onyl thing i would have changed is the background otherwise great job nogol.

[Nogol]

thanks. i'm not sure what to do with the background.

[Captain_404]

Hm, don't know if you were done with your image yet or not (you posted the new one after I started work on this one) but I thought I'd hop in and give this a shot.



Love the broken mirror effect in your image btw!

[Nogol]

there's not much difference actually. and i'm done with the image...

been away from FK for some time... got to start training again.

[silverx2]

even just black, i like it more. in the first one the background was distracting to much from the center piece.

[lefteyewilly]

beautiful image nogol. great execution!

[Captain_404]

Hmm, no crits/comments from any of you about my image? I can understand ignoring it and hoping it will just go away, but I do want to make sure it at least got posted right...can everyone see it?

[lefteyewilly]

yup it's there captain.

Nice use of color on yours.

[Dricciotti]

the onyl thing i would have changed is the background otherwise great job nogol.

I like the first one better Nogol. The black is too plain without something in it.

Nice job!

[1stbite]

captain:
i like the broken faded butterflies, i think you need to find something to work with in your image to give it more of a focal point though.

Nogol:
I prefer the first image, i think if you added more contrast to the background or more depth to the image by introducing some shadowing on the background from the glass then it would be a prefect volley.

[/crit]

found some time in a break to volley...

counting...

[Zacaboo288]

Nogol- The black background works much better. It adds a tremendous amount of depth and your image really explodes out of that negative space now. I also think you executed the shattering technique very well, fracturing the image intensely yet still keeping it unified and maintaining harmony in the overall composition. I enjoy that there is no absurdly obvious focal point, albeit the lips are quite prominent. It's a bit nonlinear that way and gives me the opportunity to come in at the image from many places, enjoying more of the detail that you put into the piece.

Captain- Although *it appears* simple in style and execution, I'd say your image is balanced well in composition. You have a lot of horizontal movement happening and I think it would excellent to see that developed a bit more. Because there is a lot of focus directly in the center of your image, it cuts down on the movement quite a bit (things captured in motion are often not aligned perfectly center). Perhaps you could shift foreground elements, such as the butterflies and text, more to the left, almost cropping the edges of the wings. It might regain the idea of movement and add more context to the piece. Another thing that is perhaps only a nitpick is that the image is a bit dark and I think adding even a little bit of white to highlight a few areas would add more depth.

1stbite- What can I say? That is such an interesting piece. The angles are fantastic, the lighting is very ominous and I think you've done a technically sound job of incorporating the previous element. To delve into technique a little further, I think the i too will fade element is slightly askew. The leftmost end of the element lines up well, as you can see the i is inline with the tally marks. The rightmost end becomes askew as the straight edge of the d, for example, does not quite line up with the tally marks. I think using a perspective transformation to straighten it out a bit would really allow it to sink into the wall even more. However, that's just me being quite fastidious for small details but overall it's a great piece.