You have a great, simple, original comicky style to your drawings, and the animation is OK, but IMHO you need to work on your storylines. The average 3-panel Peanuts strip has more storyline than your stuff -- there are no satisfactory endings or punchlines, they just start somewhere and stop somewhere else. Sorry if this sounds blunt -- but you did ask for opinions...!
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It's funny. You posted your work up here, and a number of people made comments and suggestions. You totally ignore these, do not respond to any of them, and then ask everyone to vote for you! Why would anybody go through this process, except to bump up their ratings a little? IMHO, it's just spam by another name. Good luck, but you won't be getting my vote...
Hmm I'm going to say that your cartoon really needs to have some breathing spots.
Your timing is too dit-dit-dit-dit; one thing hits right after the other; you don't give the viewer any time to sit and ponder what's going on.
It just happens and keeps going and going, and I kept asking myself: what's the character's goal? His motivation?
Apparently the main character (the antagonist to his roommate, so far as I could tell) was hogging everything and making life difficult (and a lot of shattered windows); when he caught on fire, I nearly expected to see his roommate throw a jug of gasoline on him and laugh maniacally at the burning of his annoying antagonistic roomie. But in the end, they go back to the apartment as if nothing's changed...
Stylization was very fun and the tweening was nice, from a technical standpoint. Drawings were easily readable and it was obvious what was going on.
But I'm still going to say that there should have been more time to sit and let the viewer breathe amongst all the crazy hyper-fast action that was happening! Slow down a beat or two, or even just a few moments... right now it's very sporadic, and like I said, I didn't really get a sense of what the main character was after.
just a little c/c
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