I definately appreciate what you guys are sayin. I kinda like this one though, the point wasn't to imitate what we perceive as real. I mulled over the text and the yellow stripes for a while and couldn't figure out what else to do, i dunno.

The perspective thing is kinda like the impressionist cezanne, he would paint in a way that it seemed like there were multiple perspectives in the same image creating visual tension.

Thanks for the crits and don't stop giving em cause it made me go back and rethink some things.